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#1 new hamster owner

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Posted 27 March 2012 - 06:35 AM

tell me if you like!!
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I woke up. I heard my dog barking. I went down stairs and my dog was under the table. Shaking. I tried to figure out what was wrong. He was startled by my brother. Mike. “Mike leave Sam alone!”I said. “Why?” asked Mike. I walked upstairs and back into my room. I went on my laptop. When I turned it on, I saw a picture of the cutest hamster ever! I clicked on the picture and it brought me to a website. It said “Adopt An Animal Today” I thought about that picture and website for awhile then…..
“Kayla, its time for school, your bus will be here soon” said my mom.
“Ok ill be down in a minute.”
I wanted to ask my mom about getting a hamster, but I’m going to wait and ask her after school. Beep. Beep.
“Oh no, the bus!”
I ran outside and got on the bus. I sat right next to my best friend Mayah. I told her how I saw the picture of the hamster and went to the website.
“Well what do you think your mom will say?” asked Mayah
“To be honest? I really don’t know.” I said
“ Were at school.” Said the bus driver.
“ Bye Mayah.”
“Bye Kay.”
I sat through all my classes wondering what my mom would say.
“I really hope she says yes.” I said.
“What did you say Kayla, I asked what the square root of 64 was?” said Mr. Colombo.
“Oh ummm…. 8?” I answered with a guess.
“Yea good job!” exclaimed Mr. Colombo.
When I rode home, on the bus I got really nervous.
Mayah wasn’t on the bus, on the way home I guess she stayed after school?
“Mom?”
“Yes Kayla?”
“Can I buy a ummm…. Hamster?”
“Please?” I asked.
“Sure! We can go to the pet store tomorrow after school.”
“Ok can I bring Mayah with us? Please?”
“Sure make sure her mom is ok with it.”
“Ok.”
I went back to my room. Picked up my phone, and sent Mayah a message.
To: Mayah 
Hey Mayah! My mom said I can get a hamster! Do you want to come to the pet store with me? After school tomorrow? My mom can drive us.

~Kayla

I waited till she texted back.
From: Mayah 
Sure! My mom said its ok. And can I get off your bus tomorrow after school?


To: Mayah 
Yea sure! Maybe I can get 2 hamsters! A boy and a girl! They can have babies!
Well I g2g ill c ya tomorrow! 
~Kayla

“Hey Mom?”
“Yes Kayla?” asked mom.
“can I get 2 hamsters? I want a boy and girl.”
“Sure, but you better take good care of them.” Said my mom
“Thanks!” I exclaimed.
I went up to my room and fell asleep. When I woke up I was so excited!
“Bye mom, see you later!”
I gave my mom and brother a hug and kiss.
Beep. Beep.
I ran out to the bus. I sat next to Mayah. I told her everything my mom said and how I can get 2 hamsters. She was so excited to go with me.
“Well bye.”
“Bye” said Mayah.
I kept looking back and forth at the teacher and at the clock waiting for the clock to strike 3:00!
“Finally! Its 3 o’clock”
I sat on the bus. I talked with Mayah about names, colors, and even cages!!
“Mom?”
“Yes?”
“Are you ready?”
“Yea let’s go?” said Mom
“Hi Mayah.” Said mom
“Hi Mrs. Kettle.”
We got in the car.
“So what are some good names? For a boy and girl?” I asked.
“How about Cupcake, Angel, Marcus, and or Yoshi?”Asked mom
“I like Cupcake and Yoshi. What about you Mayah?”
“I love all those names!” She exclaimed.
We saw a big building….

I got so excited!
“Here!” said my mom
We opened the car doors and ran into Petsmart.
“Hey mom,Mayah! Look at her!” I said
“I love it” said both my mom and Mayah.
“Hi can I help you?” said one of the Petsmart workers.
“Yes, can I hold her please?” I asked
“Sure.” She said
We took out the girl hamster and played with her for awhile. I really liked her.
“Mom I want this one.”
“ok we are going to buy this one.” Said my mom.
“ok, any other items you would like to buy?” asked the worker.
“Yes, we are going to buy a boy hamster.” Said my mom.
“So what are you going to name her?” asked Mayah.
“ Cupcake!” I exclaimed
“Do you like it?”
“I love it!” Mayah said.
“How about him, Kayla?” asked my mom.
“Oh my god! He’s adorable!!” I said.
“His name will be.…. Yoshi!” I exclaimed.
“Hi can I buy these 2 hamsters?” asked my mom.
“Sure!” said the cashier.
We walked out of the pet store. We are on our way home.
“Mom, I already set up the cage, the food and the bedding and water.” I said.
“Good.”
“Mom can Mayah come over for a little while longer?” I asked.
“Sure if her mom is ok with it?” said my mom.
“Yea she said its ok.” Said Mayah.
“Ok cool!”I exclaimed.
“When we get home, put Yoshi and Cupcake in them in the cage. Then I need you to make sure their food bowls are full and make sure their water is full and have their bedding all set and ready. Then leave them alone for a little while because they need to get used to their new home. If you don’t leave them alone they will get wet tail, and they can die from that disease. Here is the medicine in case it happens if they seem different, come and tell me, and I will help you. Ok?” lectured Mom.
“Yes, Mom what happens if they do get Wet Tail? What do we do with the medicine?” asked Kayla
“When I had my hamster, Chewy, she got Wet Tail and my mom explained it to me. Its when your hamster is so stressed it gets diarrhea and he can die, that’s how my hamster ummm… died.” Sobbed Mayah
“Oh I’m so sorry Mayah!” said Kayla
“If you want you can come over everyday and help me take care of Yoshi and Cupcake! We can even try to make them have babies and you can have 1 or 2, does that sound good?” I asked friendly.
“Yea sure that would be great!” exclaimed Mayah
“Mom is that ok with you?” I asked.
“Yea that’s a good idea!” said My Mom.
“Ok were here!” I said.
“Ok remember what I said about leaving it alone.” Lectured mom
“Ok we understand.” Mayah and I said.
TO BE CONTINUED………………
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Edited by new hamster owner, 27 March 2012 - 06:35 AM.





#2 SyrianPumpkin

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Posted 27 March 2012 - 07:56 AM

I really like this the only thing is I really dislike how she is making them breed. Breeding takes years of research as said before, and even then a mistake could happen and you'd end up with an eyeless, toothless, hairless, etc. pups. You need to research on genetics, and genetics is a BIG PART. UBER BIG! You should NEVER breed a petstore hamster because you don;t know anything about the genetics.
Other than that i like it :)

#3 princess-sprinkles

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Posted 29 March 2012 - 06:47 AM

i really liked this story! It's totally cute, and it really envokes the feelings of getting a new hamster. I felt sad for mayah when she was talking about her hamster dying :disappointed:

really cool, I would like to read a continuation if you write one. :pullinghair:

#4 Tangerine

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Posted 11 April 2012 - 09:04 AM

Wow that is really good, You should do a continuation! I really want to know what the hammys look like and what type they are, there names are so cute too. :)

#5 Robolover13

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Posted 27 May 2012 - 07:46 AM

I like it but, I wouldn't promote breeding if I were you. It's not the greatest thing to do Posted Image

#6 princesshamster

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Posted 27 May 2012 - 11:15 PM

Great story! ;D

#7 bubblepop727

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Posted 28 May 2012 - 09:30 AM

The story is ok, but I don't like the fact of breeding like everyone else.

#8 Rubyyyyyyyy

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Posted 29 May 2012 - 04:35 AM

Dwarf hamsters don't commonly get wet tail...and are you housing Syrians together to breed? What type of hamsters are they?

Cute story, but maybe you could change it so they are living separately? :)