Writing a story
Posted 26 June 2009 - 10:29 PM
Posted 26 June 2009 - 10:37 PM
Edited by canyoudothehamham, 27 June 2009 - 10:50 PM.
Posted 27 June 2009 - 09:23 PM
Edited by Laila, 27 June 2009 - 09:23 PM.
Posted 27 June 2009 - 09:28 PM
There's a lack of description of time, place and setting, also you should watch out for the exclamation points. It looks very unprofessional when you use more than one. ^^ Take a good look at books written by well-known authors and learn from there. That's what I did. It's a good start though!
Thanks for the constructive criticism!!! Keep it coming!