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#1 cityStatic

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Posted 26 June 2009 - 10:29 PM

Now that I have a ton of free time on my hands, I'm writing a story.




#2 cityStatic

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Posted 26 June 2009 - 10:37 PM

First tidbit:

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Edited by canyoudothehamham, 27 June 2009 - 10:50 PM.


#3 Laila

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Posted 27 June 2009 - 09:23 PM

There's a lack of description of time, place and setting, also you should watch out for the exclamation points. It looks very unprofessional when you use more than one. ^^ Take a good look at books written by well-known authors and learn from there. That's what I did. It's a good start though!

Edited by Laila, 27 June 2009 - 09:23 PM.


#4 cityStatic

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Posted 27 June 2009 - 09:28 PM

There's a lack of description of time, place and setting, also you should watch out for the exclamation points. It looks very unprofessional when you use more than one. ^^ Take a good look at books written by well-known authors and learn from there. That's what I did. It's a good start though!


Thanks for the constructive criticism!!! Keep it coming! :propeller: